STORY IDEA #280: 10% Commission

A new story idea every single day.

Ideas can be shit, detailed, loose, tight, scenario-based, character-based, or could just be a single line of dialogue which might later unfurl itself into a glorious tendril of butt-tickling wonder-magic … or something.

Stole this concept from @ryanklindsay.

Check out the previous ideas here.

#280: 10% Percent

A young couple move into a new rented house and they love it. But there's strange things happening in there. They start getting sleep paralysis more and more, each time seeing more and more shadow people. And their cat is looking and meowing at things that aren't there.

These shadow people suddenly take one of them in the night and they disappear.

The next day the other one falls asleep and is visited by more shadow people, this time he recognises the outline of one. It's their partner. They've been taken and turned.

He screams as they rush him.

Cut to the following morning and the letting agent is in the house shouting for them. When he realises they're gone, he takes something from under the sink. It's some sort of pagan witchery. Twine around the shape of a human or something.
Anyway he smiles and says 'looks like number 23 is going back on the market. Another chance to get my 10% commission.'